Fiction Writing: How to Write Your Character's Thoughts

Melanie L. Marten
In quality fiction writing it is often important to tell what your character is thinking. There are multiple acceptable methods for doing this. The method you choose depends largely on the point of view of your story, and the specific publication you are writing for.

Character Thought in Fiction Writing - Basic Methods

The two main methods of how to write your character's thoughts in fiction are through the use of Italics or quotation marks and commas. In the first example, your characters thoughts would be written in italics without any quotation marks. You would still put a, between the thought and the thought tag such as "she thought."

In the second example, your characters thoughts would be witnessed the same way as spoken dialogue. The actual thought would be in quotation marks and you would use a comma before the speech tag.

Character Thought in Fiction Writing - Point of View

The point of view you write your fiction in will also determine how to write your characters thoughts. First person point of view uses the word I and is told from the experience and knowledge of only one character. If you use first person point of view in your fiction writing, your character's thoughts may be handled in a different way. When this story is told by one of the characters it is not necessary to put thought in Italics or quotation marks all the time. She or she can simply share their thoughts that the reader.

Third person point of view, that is the construction that uses he, she or it, usually has thoughts written in either a Italics or quotation marks. However, if you're fiction writing is in what is called close or limited third person point of view some of the point of view characters thoughts can be shared much the same as in first person point of view.

In either point of view listed above, phrases and sentence is that are actively thought of by your character would still be put in Italics or quotation marks. The types of character's thoughts that do not need that treatment are those that reflect on the setting or events as they take place from the narrating character's point of view.

Character Thought in Fiction Writing - Publication Specific

If you intend to submit your fiction writing the application, the most important thing to remember a writing your characters thoughts is to do it the way the specific publication wishes you to. If this type of style guidelines is not spelled out in the submission rules, delve into the archives of the publication and see how characters thoughts are handled in other stories that were accepted.

Published by Melanie L. Marten

Melanie Marten is self-taught and self-employed. Besides freelance writing, she dabbles in website design and owns dozens of websites and blogs. Work is squeezed in between parenting two boys, homeschoolin...   View profile

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  • Gabriel Gadfly 5/1/2009

    I tend to stay away from italics. It's easier to just fit the character's thoughts seemlessly into the narrative without making them stand out with a contrivance like italicized text. The only time I do use italics are when I have a scene where some sort of telepathy is used -- italics can be used to differentiate between projected thoughts and internal thoughts.

  • Cami Micheals 4/8/2009

    Very helpful tips, thanks!

  • Sharon Morris 3/26/2009

    Great tips Melanie! :)

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