For the Down and Out

Sable Kunoichi

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Kari liked things low pro

Enjoying nursing

When she worked she was steadfast

She had much compassion

Enjoying nursing

Giving her a sense of accomplishment

She had much compassion

For the down and out

Giving her a sense of accomplishment

Bringing balance and order

For the down and out

Some called her an angel

Bringing balance and order

When she worked she was steadfast

Mistress of the craft

Kari liked things low pro

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  • Harry Gunawan1/23/2008

    Aha.. the gentle side of Kari. Every superhero is great in making better place for society. In costume or not! Great poem! Kady is right! Make her a comic character please!!! :-D

  • Lisa Renee.1/6/2008

    This is really good...keep it up!

  • Kady Burney1/6/2008

    Okay, I'm not trying to sound snobby, so please don't take it that way. Sometimes, I don't have time to come back for a second read, but I am. You really have some great stuff going on here. I also have a question, do you ever read your works aloud? If you do, read this one line to yourself and please actually do it, okay? Here's the line you wrote, "When she worked she was steadfast, Mistress of the craft..." That is some really good stuff you have here. I mean that and I do so hope you can talk to people about getting this into a book or something to that effect. I really hope you consider that.

    Many people are inspired by the Asian ways of life. Much of it is so mysterious and new to Americans. I like how you bring both to the readers and to the writing community. I say this and I am honest, people need to read this!!!!! I wish I could scream, because this is some good stuff!

    Keep it up!

  • Kady Burney1/6/2008

    WOW!!!! I'm loving this!!!! I really really really think you should put Kari in some sort of book or write a collection on her! I mean, you've really got it going on here!!!!! You mix reality with unreality and with ancient mystique. I've got to say this has me coming back for more and more and more! WOWEEEE!!!! I mean I'm stomping my feet in anticipation!!! great works of art that you are creating! I've got to say I'm biased, but this really is a spiritual and emotional and REAL piece of artistic poetry!!!

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