The Whisperer:
The Moribund River, in the cursed land of Perdition, boils with fire. It breathes mud-like pockets of ashes and bones. On its west bank a vile creature named Pernicious crawls to its edges. His exaggerated eagle claws scratch the surface of Perdition's thirsty terrain. He drags his broken skeletal body closer to the flames of Moribund.
The fiery river, he believes, will heal him. But he fears its power and does not touch. He can only wait for help and hope he is worth something to someone in this desolate land.
"Whisperer!" a voice thunders. "Come here!"
Pernicious mumbles and ignores the hollering of the one they call Abaddon. "Son of Anak," the Whisperer screeches, "leave me be!"
Heat and dry dust burns in their throats. Ashes fall like snow. Both beings are irritated but wait for the magic of Moribund's fire. Will it bring them life, such as it is, or claim it?
"How could you lose to the Canaanite, a mere human?" Pernicious scoffs. His voice is more raspy than usual. "You are twice his size with the strength of ten men." He starts to mock his superior but thinks better of it. His taunt is a measly whisper. "Abaddon, mighty leader of the Nephilim, indeed." Pernicious raises his bony jaw in defiance. The ground shakes and billows of smoke rise through the fractures of the land. "I was once mightier than the likes of you ¯stronger, swifter, and prettier, I might add, a better warrior than you, by far. I was . . . long ago."
The Whisperer chooses silence for a second or two, haunted by the memories of the perfect being he used to be. Jealousy, an annoying weakness of his, is the reason why he is now counted among the fallen.
How did I get this way? Why was I jealous of that Warrior, Paladin? I was already better than he, superior to say the least. His scorpion tail, coiled between the hanging skins of his hind legs, rattles and drips with poison. "You!" He points his decrepit claws to the leader of the Nephilim who is coughing and sputtering as the reddish mists of dust and air infiltrate his lungs. "You and your kind brought me down!"
Abaddon:
Abaddon, for the most part, keeps quiet. No doubt, he hopes that the future is grim for the Whisperer. Nevertheless, he and Pernicious both lie dying on the scorched land.
He is the General of the Nephilim (offspring of fallen angels) but he cannot remember a time such as this when he had cared about discomfort. The sharp pain in his head is beyond what he wants to bear. He squints and repeatedly bangs the back of his head on the parched ground. His pitch black eyes close, caving into the hollow of his sockets. Shortness of breath is his clue that life is fading. Like Pernicious, he waits.
Help finally comes when the Dark Lord of the South River (the part of the river which runs closest to Lake Torment at the end of the Moribund) appears from the miserable wastes of Perdition. Light from Perdition's gushing fires reflect on his chain mail shirt. A hooded cape, mostly torn, grey and stained with blood, flutters around him.
"Lord of the South," Abaddon moans, "Keeper of the fire. Heal me."
Lord of the South River:
The Dark Lord uses a small oval flask of ocher glass to capture the blazing flames of the Moribund's southern regions. His hands are riddled with burn marks. Strange to say, but there is a tree that thrives in the land of Perdition ¯ one small tree near the edge of Lake Torment.
No one there knows how it grows or why. Its leaves never wither though it takes the full brunt of the fire. Surprisingly, it bears fruit similar to an apple ¯ some bright red, some a cool green, and others as gold as the sun. Nevertheless, when the fruit is plucked from the branches, it shrivels and rots in one's hand. The unattainable harvest is sheer torture to the Whisperers, and especially the Nephilim whose hunger is everlasting.
The Dark Lord stands in the shadow of this tree. He plunges his sword into the depths of the roots and, as the fire of the lake passes through the cut, he skillfully snares it in his soot-blemished flask. Not a word must leave his lips as he carries out the task before him.
This flask he now opens over Abaddon's body and lets the fire drip like lava onto his lesions. Abaddon screams. His anguish is heard throughout the land. But in Perdition his cries will be ignored as his flesh sizzles and melts together. A putrid smell hangs like a heavy cloud that refuses to dissipate.
The Dark Lord chants a daunting song. He sees Pernicious cower closer to the banks of the Moribund River. "Hoping to receive but a drop, are we?" Laugher bellows from deep inside the slender body of the Dark Lord.
The Whisperer looks away as the Dark Lord takes his sword, dripping with fire, and violently thrusts it through the giant head of Abaddon. When he takes it out, three small stones are on the blade. The chant continues.
"Canaanite!" Abaddon hollers.
The Dark Lord's song is over. He smiles. His delight is wicked. "Taken down with a sling and a shot, I see ¯ three precise shots."
Abaddon is not amused.
"Give me the fire also," Pernicious grunts. "Just one drop."
"Pathetic shell of a demon," the Dark Lord grumbles. "What is your life worth to anyone?" He pours more of the liquid fire, until near empty, on the remainder of Abaddon's wounds. The he meanders toward the Whisperer and tosses the ocher glass Pernicious' way.
The Unholy Union:
Pernicious licks each precious drop and lets them slowly progress through his body. He bathes in the healing of Abaddon's leftovers. A feeble attempt to stand brings him down to his four spiny claws. His body shudders as his bones reconnect. Abaddon helps him, mysteriously tied in an unholy friendship with the lowly creature. They will not admit it, but both will need the other to battle the armies of man.
The Whisperer and the nine-foot Abaddon are standing side by side like father and son. The fire stirs hot and angry within them. Never before has either felt pure evil in this form ¯ life created for the sake of wickedness. It is eternal. Abaddon (known in Canaan as The Destroyer) is healed and he will waste no time to exploit his new powers.
The Whisperer glares at the Dark Lord of the South River with nothing but contempt. The Dark Lord cracks his ancient bones of his neck as he circles Pernicious. "I had no desire to see you healed," he says.
"Be careful, my lord, I am a Whisperer after all. You do not know the depth and width of my powers. Can you make the Canaanite hear what is not spoken or see what is not there? Can you sway him to turn from his righteous ways and give up his place in the heavens? No, my lord, you cannot."
Abaddon will not stomach the ranting of the Whisperer and demands an end to his chatter. "Lord of the South River, go you way," he snaps. "We are done with your services."
The Dark Lord bows slowly and takes his leave. He is gone before the Whisperer has a chance to speak again.
Abaddon begins to pound his stony feet on the waterless grounds of Perdition, walks to the spot where the Dark Lord had healed him and spits. Pernicious slithers next to Abaddon. The Destroyer, having one more purpose for Pernicious, picks him up and propels him carelessly upon his back.
"Bring me the Canaanite," he orders. He glares at Pernicious with his haunting eyes. "Without him, Canaan will fall to us. I will give you an army of Whisperers."
"And I will be their leader?" Pernicious snivels with glee.
"As sure as I am the leader of the Nephilim."
"Then I will bring you the Canaanite," Pernicious whispers. "But Canaan and all its treasures will belong to me alone."
"Let it be so," Abaddon says.
They walk through the valleys of shadows and death till they reach the mouth of Perdition's gate to enter the realm of man.
. . . To Be Continued in the Land of Warriors . . .
Published by Debby Alten
Debby is a member of the SGV Inklings writing group and co-partner of G8 Press http://www.g8press.com. She's been published in "The Upper Room" magazine as well as her local newspaper. View profile
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