The radio tuned to her subconscious, Charity Neebe of NPR announcing endless dot orgs she'll never recall. Each broadcast bleeding into the next. She moves instinctively in her woken dream state until the semi truck swerves.
There is a focusing involved as if the mind has turned the camera on and pressed record. The semi clips the concrete viaduct and barrels into the red S-10. The two vessels scream along the median wall until the semi swerves away. Crimped, the pickup veers back into traffic and is struck again by the semi.
The T-Boned strike thrusts the tiny truck into the air in some surreal aerial fit; its passenger side tire abandoning its post. A shimmer of light is thrown from the windshield signaling each rotation like a second hand. It counts three before gravity regains its monarchal reign over the mass and brings it down upon the cab of the semi. The driver is crushed as the S-10 rolls off end over end, jettisoning its contents as it goes. The world seems to stop for a moment, take in a breath, process what has happened.
The man crawls out the back window of his pickup and the world exhales. The traffic lurches around the scene. There is some shifting, they accelerate into non-being again as the billboards blur McDonalds this exit, McDonalds this exit. She realizes she is lost within the negative spaces of time and then she's home in her bed again, setting her alarm, turning out the light and driving away.
Published by J L Carey Jr
J L Carey Jr, Author of the book Turning Pages, is a writer and an artist living in Michigan with his wife and three children. He holds an MFA in Creative Writing from National University and a BA in Englis... View profile
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6 Comments
Post a CommentAlready commented, but see if this counts towards another PV, Jeff. AC glitches are back again, btw!
Excellent prose. Reminds me of the accident that both my parents and the semi-truck driver survived. My parent's were airborn in their pickup truck when hit, and my father crawled out the side window. Everyone was alright, much to the amazement of the police. Your piece brings back memories both good and bad of that fateful day. Someone was asleep at the wheel like your main character here.
Your prose is as vivid as your poetry, but I'm new to flash fiction, so will have to investigate further.
I like the imagery of the car rotating in the air with light 'like a second hand'--excellent.
"The radio tuned to her subconscious, Charity Neebe of NPR announcing endless dot orgs she'll never recall."
Beautiful writing!
Wow, surreal and vividly detailed. Funny, I chose the same starting line for mine. I hope to have it done by tomorrow, but we'll see.