Picking Karoo Num-num's

Short Story Assignment: Write a Story About an Animal or Animals

J L Carey Jr
For Dave and Gracie

On a sunny morning, just outside the village of Burundi, the dark green water of the Rusizi rippled around Bendire and Crissal. The two thrashers sat on a protrusion in the middle of the river, Bendire picking at his feathers as Crissal rested; his neck cocked to one side as his squinted eyes stared at the shore. A pungency rose from the water, but the smell did not seem to bother either of the birds, nor did it the two young girls picking Karoo num-num's along the muddy bank of that forlorn place.

"Why is it you think people pick those flowers?" Crissal puzzled, his head still leaning to one side.

"What's that?" Bendire huffed, pruning a louse from the feathers beneath his left wing.

"The flowers. Why do people pick those flowers?"

The bird pinched the louse in his long beak and then swallowed. "Maybe they like being stung," he huffed and then he bent to his work.

"Hmmm," Crissal chirped.

"Yeah," Bendire muttered with a peck, his eye watching the two girls. "Those people are a strange species," he continued, his feathers puffing as his wings stretched and settled again. "I think they're all glutton for punishment."

"Is it me or are those girls getting closer to us?"

"It's you," Bendire twitched. "It seems whatever those people do winds up hurting them in the end. They're always picking and pulling and cutting something down. Just look at the two of them. They're yanking those flowers out of the ground and for what purpose? So they can stick them in a jar and watch them die."

"Hmmm?"

"Somebody aught to pluck them from the shore," Bendire huffed. "See how they'd like it."

"Are you sure they're not getting closer to use?" Crissal said, straitening his head.

"What?" Bendire twitched, the water rippling faster around them, rippling as a snout broke the surface before them, tearing from the dark green current like a prehistoric missile, a missile garbed in teeth and scales.

It was over before the two birds had properly shit themselves. On the shore a solitary girl stood screaming as white num-num's coiled and drifted in the wake of Gustave's tail, the humps of the great crocodile's back slipping beneath the water as it went.

"Hmmm!" Muttered Crissal, his wings lifting him into the blue African sky while his eyes remained fixed on the queer patch of shore where the girl had stood.

"I know," Bendire flapped. "I thought it was a rock too."

Published by J L Carey Jr

J L Carey Jr, Author of the book Turning Pages, is a writer and an artist living in Michigan with his wife and three children. He holds an MFA in Creative Writing from National University and a BA in Englis...  View profile

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  • Tina Twito4/1/2010

    Great vivid imagery. Nice undercomment on humanity as a destructive force.

  • Grace Anne Carey3/7/2010

    hehehe....Gustave...:)

  • Jan Corn3/6/2010

    So vivid and creative!

  • Walton S. Tissot3/2/2010

    (:

  • Christine Bruness3/2/2010

    Terrific piece to read this morning! Brilliant ending!

  • Grace Carey2/28/2010

    nice...:)

  • Tikuli Dogra2/27/2010

    I liked your story. A very well written and effectively expressed.

  • Paul Rance2/25/2010

    Yeah, nature's cruel sometimes!

  • Shaheen Darr2/25/2010

    you have brought a scene to life, I remember watching crocs in Africa and thinking how rock like they seem...excellent

  • Linda Louise Johnson2/24/2010

    Ewww. That wasn't very nice of the great crocodile. He got one girl and two birds right and all for the love of numnums and louse. You are fantastically gifted!

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