This Post is Really Very Nice, but Not Awesome!

Creative Writing Tips

Jill Davidson
The title of this post doesn't tell you much, does it?

In my creative writing class, our instructor forbade us to ever use the words really, very, or nice in any work we turned in. These are meaningless, lukewarm words that don't give our readers much information. Replace them with descriptive substitutes that paint a picture in your readers' minds.

Is it really, or is it absolutely, substantially, genuinely, undeniably?

Is it very, or is it exceedingly, perfectly, fundamentally, completely, unconditionally, immeasurably, essentially?

Is it nice, or is it savory, beautiful, pleasant, fastidious, attentive, detailed, kind?

Which sentence gives a better picture?

My mother-in-law is very nice.
My mother-in-law is exceedingly kind.

The dinner was really nice.
The dinner was absolutely delicious.

Here are examples of other lukewarm words that can be replaced with more descriptive substitutes:
Good: honest, kind, virtuous, excellent, satisfactory, functionable
Bad: evil, diseased, wicked, unhealthy, dangerous, defective, unfavorable
About: approximately, nearly, no less than, almost, approaching
Big: enormous, extensive, huge, massive
Small: minute, slight, trivial, insignificant
Quick: brisk, prompt, rapid, nimble, hasty

Don't give your reader the impression that you have a limited vocabulary. Every writer should have a thesaurus on their desk or in their bookmarks. No, a thesaurus is not a type of dinosaur! It is a dictionary of synonyms and antonyms that can help you replace lukewarm words with more descriptive ones. Not all choices have the same meaning, so choose the word that best suits what you are trying to say.

Another overused word that has become meaningless is "awesome." The definition of awesome is: fear mixed with reverent awe, something majestic. Your new shoes may be fashionable, stylish, impressive, or astonishing, but they are not awesome! Strike this word from your vocabulary unless you are talking about God or visiting the Grand Canyon.

Published by Jill Davidson

Ms. Davidson is self-employed as a secondhand merchant, crafter, and free-lance writer.  View profile

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  • Rosa Hayes4/7/2008

    Your article was excellent and dangerous to those who don't want to listen, it was almost as good as the lecture that my instructor gave to me in school, very enormous in the use of words and description, defiantly slight and brisk but right to the point. I guess what I am trying to say is that the article was very good, could be bad for those who still use simple words, it was defiantly big even though it was quick and small. I loved this article and will keep it in mind the next time that I write.

  • J. E. Davidson3/27/2008

    Fabulous is OK! Thanks for the compliment.

  • Question Everything3/26/2008

    Can I say your article was fabulous? : ) Okay, fine, how about well-written, informative, and full of practical advice for those looking to hone their craft. You rock!

  • cathiesbloggs3/19/2008

    Educational piece !

  • Chris M. Carmichael3/18/2008

    fantastic enlightening reminders :-)

  • Harriet Steinberg3/15/2008

    Jill, thank you for such an illuminating, illustrious, distinctive, righteous, article. I was really tremendously scintillated by this fascinating piece that you demonstrated to your most attentive readers and now a readee.

  • Charlene Collins3/14/2008

    Exactly. We are to let the reader experience the feel of the article or story. Writing is made up of 7 senses, our 5 senses and time and space. We should not tell the reader what to think, but let the reader experience what he/or she reads. Great ... umm ... I men superbly written.:D

  • Girl Gone Fishing3/14/2008

    Well I have never seen the grand canyon. I can however say that God and this article are both very awesome.

  • 3lilangels3/14/2008

    I loved it, this was great and awesome lol. Nice job here and love the learning lesson here.

  • J. E. Davidson3/14/2008

    Debbie, thanks for your awesome comment! It was really very nice.

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